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IN BRITAIN, WHEN SOME ONE GETS OLD THEY OFTEN FO TO LIVE WITH OTHER OLDER PEOPLE WHERE THERE ARE NURSES TO LOOK AFTER THEM. SOMETIMES, GOVERNMENT HAS TO PAY FOR THEIR STAY. WHO DO YOU THINK SHOULD PAY FOR THIS CARE , GOVERNMENT OR FAMILY?

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TODAY'S LIFE HAS BECAME FAST WHERE NO ONE HAS TIME FOR THEIR
FAMILY
 TO SPEND.
THEREFORE
, MYRIAD OF OLDER GENERATION PREFERRED TO LIVE THE REST OF THEIR LIFE WITH THE FOLK WHO ARE AT THE SAME AGE AND THAT PLACE IS CALLED OLD AGE HOME. THERE THEY HAVE THE HEALTH WORKERS WHO TAKE CARE OF THEM.
THIS
 ESSAY WOULD DISCUSS WHY GOVERNMENT SHOULD SUPPORT THEM FOR
THIS
 CARE ESPECIALLY MEDICALLY ILL OLD AGE INDIVIDUALS AND WHY NOT THE
FAMILY
. WHEN
FAMILY
 SUPPORTS THE OLDER
FAMILY
 MEMBER WHEN THEY STAY WITH OTHER SAME AGE FOLK,
FAMILY
 PERHAPS FAILING FINANCIALLY TO BALANCE THE EQUAL ATTENTION IN BETWEEN CHILDREN AND PARENTS.
THIS
 WOULD END UP RUIN EVERYONE'S LIVELIHOOD.
FOR INSTANCE
, ACCORDING TO THE OLD AGE HOMES SURVEY, 70% OF THE OLDER FOLK'S FAMILIES FACE THE FINANCIAL IMBALANCE AS THEY HAVE TO SPEND MORE AMOUNT OF CURRENCY TO TAKE CARE OF THEIR PARENTS THE CAREGIVERS.
IN CONTRAST
, IF THE REGIME SUPPORTS THOSE PEOPLE, THEY DO NOT HAVE TO WORRIED ABOUT THEIR FAMILIES SITUATION AND THEY CAN STAY HAPPY AND WORRIED FREE.
THIS
 WOULD HELP THEM TO RECOVER FAST AND MAKE
LAST
 DAYS MEMORABLE.
HOWEVER
,
THIS
 PERHAPS INCREASE THE BURDEN ON THE NATIONAL HEALTH CARE SYSTEM.
FOR EXAMPLE
, AS PER THE USA HEALTH CARE SYSTEM REPORT, 80% OF THE INDIVIDUALS WHO ARE AT THE AGE OF 70 LIVING JOYFUL LIFE WITH THE OTHER SAME AGE FRIENDS WITHOUT WORRYING ABOUT THE CHILDREN. IN CONCLUSION, AFTER THE ABOVE DISCUSSION I FIND THAT IF THE AUTHORITY SPONSOR THE CARE FARE THAN FAMILIES COULD ABLE TO SAVES MONEY THAT COULD BE ASSIST IN BUIDING THE JUVENILES
FURTHER
 LIVELIHOODS. AS NOT ALL THE FAMILIES ARE CAPABLE TO TAKE CARE OF THE OLDER
FAMILY
 MEMBER.
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