many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods

Many people make the assumption that the
production
of more and more goods is always a good thing for all economies. They say that
this
growth
generates wealth, not just for the wealthy
few but
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few, but
for all strata of society. They argue that increasing
production
brings immediate benefit to rich industrialists but that, in turn, they provide employment for, and buy goods and services from, other less wealthy people in the community.
Also
, it is argued that the wealthy individuals will pay more in taxes and
thus
the money
from
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for
growth
will benefit everyone, through improved health and education, and that a happier, more stable and more developed society will result.
However
, other people argue that
such
growth
in
production
can have the opposite effect. They contend that any riches tend to be claimed by the few and
trickle
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trickles
down to very few others in the community.
Also
, wealthy people know how to use a variety of devious measures to evade paying
tax
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taxes
. Another argument against
such
growth
is that even if
this
wealth does filter down to all
citizens it
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citizens, it
does not, in itself, bring about a better society.
Instead
, it can produce a consumerist mentality which draws a simple equation between having ‘things’ and being happy.
This
is bad for the moral and spiritual life of the country and
also
can damage the environment as people want more and more objects, creating pollution through
production
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the production
and disposal of waste. On balance, I feel that a compromise position is the healthiest one – some economic
growth
should be encouraged as long as there are safeguards intended to ensure fair distribution of wealth and reduce the negative impact on the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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