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The graph compares the visitors to the Caribbean Island in the
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2010 to 2016. Overall, each
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, the total tourists of the Caribbean Island experienced an upward trend and jump considerably by the end of the period. Every
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, the visitors who decided to stay on cruise ships grew steadily with a small fluctuation in the early period.
Initially
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, the visitors who staying on the cruise ship are lower than the visitors that stayed on the island which only around twenty fifth-tenth
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people and rose to half a
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people in the following
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. In 2012, these visitors decreased in
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by almost a half from the
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of visitors a
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before, which is the
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2011.
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, the
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of visitors who stay on the cruise ship increased steadily each
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and reaches the highest
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of visitors at 2
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people and
outracing
the pursuit (of a person or animal) by following tracks or marks they left behind
tracking
attracting
the
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of visitors who stay on the island by the end of the period. Turning to, the amounts of the tourist who decided to stay on the Island, in the beginning, is about 0.75
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people and have no noticeable change in the following
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.
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, it grew steadily in the
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two years and reached the
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around 1.25 billion and 1.5 billion, which keep stable with no change until 2015.
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, in 2016, the
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of visitors that stayed on the island decrease for almost 1
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and made up back to 1.5
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at the end of the time frame.
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  • digital banking
  • cybersecurity
  • data protection
  • security breaches
  • cyber attacks
  • online transactions
  • digital divide
  • surveillance
  • freedom of information
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  • ethical considerations
  • digital footprints
  • online behavior
  • information inequality
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