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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT WOMEN SHOULD PLAY AN EQUAL ROLE AS MEN IN A COUNTRY’S POLICE FORCE OR MILITARY FORCE, SUCH AS THE ARMY, WHILE OTHERS THINK WOMEN ARE NOT SUITABLE FOR THESE KIND OF JOBS. DISCUSS BOTH THE VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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In the
last
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 decade, the gender partiality has been obsoleted in the entire globe due to higher literacy rate in women. Owing to these, most people have a notion that women should play similar role in the defence
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, while others pursue a thought that
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 designation does not suite for women. Both the aspects are elucidated in the upcoming texts followed by my opinion. There are several reasons which substantiate that the paramilitary
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 jobs are not appropriate for the ladies.
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, it requires high level physical and mental fitness, which is sometimes unattainable by the female.
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, the
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 men able to survive without food and water during the war, which is unable for the female gender.
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, they have responsibilities of their family. When they join in any
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force
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, might be they are single, but when they will marry, they may leave their job for their family.
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, they have to look after their family apart from their work, which defocus their main duty, which is prima facie in defence system.With these reasons, they are easily manipulated and harassed by the opposing
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, which create trouble for the
nation
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. So, to work in security
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 is not suitable for the women because they have not ample acquired physical fitness and easily manipulated by others. On the other side, many argue that, in
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 contemporary world, many women have
ability
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the ability
an ability
 and power to conquer the world.
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, before their posting allocate, training provided by the organization, which scrutinize their skills. So, without any evaluation, the ability of women cannot be underestimated.The other argument is their patriotism. All citizens have equal rights to serve their
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, which cannot be judged by someone’s gender. To illustrate, many search operations are carried out by the Indian
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 with the help of women.
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, by providing proper instruction and their strong dedication towards the
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, the women have parallel rights to serve their
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. Agglomerating above all the stances, it can be said that
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, the defence system of the
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 require utmost body fitness, and give up the family, in my opinion, their strong feeling toward the
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, and suitable guidelines can work wonders for the
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. So, women cannot be abandoned from the military forces.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • integration
  • physical prowess
  • combat roles
  • front-line positions
  • unit cohesion
  • emotional intelligence
  • merit-based selection
  • traditional gender roles
  • career paths
  • effective communication
  • adjustments in training
  • hazardous duty
  • liability
  • distraction
  • capability
  • accommodate
  • compromise efficiency
  • safety concerns
  • role model
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