Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages.together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In our boring life
,
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,
music
can be give
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can give
can be given
us rejuvenate,
enyoyment
the pleasure felt when having a good time
enjoyment
and pleasure.
Music
is a one kind of road of
communicated
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communicating
as well as connected different community or culture together. In my knowledge based
,
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,
I cannot agree that
music
is a proper
path
something determined in relation to something that includes it
part
of coming people of
variant
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varying
cultures and ages together. I considered that
music
is
a
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an
amazing
way but
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way, but
it is not magnificent
way
.
Firstly
,
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,
There is no doubt that
melody
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the melody
can be removed our restless
,
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,
but how song can only superior
way
to add people, culture as well.
they
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They
are several of path to together society. For illustrious -qualified behaviour, dynamic personality, honesty and so on can be
tools
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tooled
of
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by
for
add
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adding
people not only
way
music
.
Moreover
,
song
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the song
also
created noise and disturb others. If
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
love
music
it does not mean that everybody loves
music
.
Secondly
, loud
music
damage our ear
,
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,
as well as
create
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creates
amply environment pollution. Like, sound pollution.
On
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At
the top of that a number of
seriour
concerned with work or important matters rather than play or trivialities
serious
citizens and Islamic mind people
does not pay
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do not pay
momentous
this
types of
way
to get connected
Although
music
maked
produced by a manufacturing process
made
market
makes
lot
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a lot
of
problems but
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problems, but
a specific time
need
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needed
to hear
song
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the song
a song
.
For example
a time when we feel alone, we need a company that time
mucis
an artistic form of auditory communication incorporating instrumental or vocal tones in a structured and continuous manner
music
macs
can do
manything
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many things
many thing
..Most of the foreigners who don’t know that country Language
thay
people in general
they
also
can feel tune. In
appenance
outward or visible aspect of a person or thing
appearance
penance
,
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,
tune is a better
path get to gether
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path to get to gather
path get to gather
path get together
community but
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community, but
it is need how we utilize in it. In conclusion, I believed that
music
is
a
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an
excellent
way but
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way, but
it is not better for everyone.
Submitted by TwO-PhRaSe- In-a-dAy on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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