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whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck

#someone #luck
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It is argued that lucky is the key to some people’s
success
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. As
success
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 is only attributed by hard
work
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 and
determination
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, I completely disagree with
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 opinion. If
success
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 was free, everyone would have it. In fact, there are few successful individuals because each of them is determined and industrious. The harder people
work
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 on their dream, the more confident they become. Those who lack self-esteem
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also lack
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also lacking
determination
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 and end up losing hope and giving up,
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 they are the failure.
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, Thomas Edison, one of the greatest inventors in the 20th century
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conducted
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the cardinal number that is the product of 10 and 100
thousands
 of
failure
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failed
 experiments with the filament until the finest light bulb was produced. His
success
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 is made by his hard
work
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, rather than
luck
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. Another clear case of
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 through
determination
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 is Nguyen Ngoc Ky
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a disabled man
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 He could not write by hand;
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, with his
determination
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 and hard word
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he is able to write by his foot and became a successful teacher.
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,
luck
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 dose
not play
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doesn't play
 a role on one’s
achivement
the action of accomplishing something
achievement
achievements
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 is just a state of mind, so if people are dependent on
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 they could never be successful.
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, a student who does not study for an exam
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 might fail.
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, it is clear that a person who wins a lottery
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might soon lose all of his or her money as it does not require anything to achieve. In conclusion, for all reasons I have mentioned above, I believe that to become a successful person at the end of the day, people must be hardworking and determined to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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