The graphs below gives information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

The graphs below gives information about computer ownership as  a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.
The bar graph compares the
percentage
of
a
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population that owns a
computer
from the
year
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years
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2002 and 2010, and by six educational levels for the years 2002 and 2010.
Overall
,
computer
ownership
steadily grew over the given period.
Similarly
, a significant
increased
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can be seen in all
level
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levels
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of education,
although
it can be observed that
higher
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level of education corresponds to
higher
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a higher
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percentage
of
ownership
in both years. In 2002, roughly 58% of the population owned a
computer
. The
percentage
rose to approximately 5% every 2 years reaching 75% in 2010.
On the other hand
, in 2002, there was a higher
percentage
of
ownership
in
people
who finished High
school
compared to
people
without
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school
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, 45% and 15% respectively. By 2010, the
percentage
of
people
without
High
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school
diploma
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nearly tripled,
while
people
who finish High
school
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doubled.
In contrast
, half of
college
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undergraduates in 2002 had a
computer
.
However
, it dramatically rose to 85% in 2010.
People
with bachelor’s
degree
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degrees
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and
post graduates
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proved to have the greatest
percentage
of
ownership
both in 2002 and 2010, 80% and 90% respectively, 10% higher than
2002
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. During the
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period
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a substantial growth
of
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computer
ownership
can be seen in the population and by educational level.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • population demographics
  • educational attainment
  • disparities
  • technological advancement
  • digital divide
  • market penetration
  • socio-economic factors
  • predictive insights
  • statistical significance
  • longitudinal study
  • accessibility
  • affordability
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