Topic: Some people prefer to provide help and support directly to those in the local community who need it. Others, however, prefer to give money to national and international charitable organizations.

Mother Theresa once said, “The greatest good is what we do for one another”. Now some may help others by offering support directly to those who need it, others,
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to national and international charitable organization, both tend to have its own merits. There are people, who are in dire need of money and are not part of or mostly are unaware of charitable bodies,
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rely on people around them, helping these people directly ensures the status of how one’s money is being used and is not being corrupted. Whereas sometimes we realize that our reach is limited
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we can’t help every impoverished person, here national and international charitable organization come in picture as they invite donators to contribute in their campaign by highlighting the cause through mass media
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ensuring that donated amount is reached to the people who are in need.
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, let’s look at two recent scenarios, during the pandemic situation due to covid-19, we can ensure that people around us who are facing crucial time to make ends meet are being taken care of by helping them directly,
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we can
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ensure we play our part in eradicating hunger crises in Yemen by reaching out to national and international charitable bodies. To put it in a nutshell, every charitable act makes a difference no matter what channel you choose, the end goal is to make a change.
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