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The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers and footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the media has tended to bring too much focus on the private
life
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 of famous people. There are some people who think that the lives of celebrities are valuable. Others,
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, think that journalists should be reporting about the
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 of ordinary people. I disagree with
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 point of view because people who are not famous usually have a normal
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,
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 people who like to read newspapers do not have any curiosity to read about ordinary lives. Usually, people buy celebrity magazines and read articles on the internet to investigate more about very well known people,
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 as artists, singers or soccer players. A good example that illustrates
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 idea is a case that happened a few days ago, when a famous Brazilian singer who had got divorced recently, by that time, was in a house with a singer, who was believed to be her date. (.) Some photographers took photos of her with
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 man, speculating that they were together and that man was a reason for the artist' divorce. Everyone got involved in
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 controversy, but at the end of the story, they were recording a new song.
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 famous people are good models for everyone, because one day, they were ordinary people, so they story´s live can inspire others to be famous one day.
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 perspective that as mentioned above is very clear that people who like gossip stories are curious to investigate about famous people´s lives not the
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 of ordinary people
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