The number of people who are overweight or obese is far higher than in previous generation. What are the reasons for this, and How this problem be tackled?

With growing modernisation in restaurant, pubs, bars, fast food, trucks and other food chains, there is rising problem of obesity. There are increasing number of obese people with each passing day. Too much fat is vulnerable
for
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to
health yet they eat
whole lot
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a whole lot
the whole lot
.
Such
practises can
resolved
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resolve
with
correct steps
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the correct steps
in
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(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
to overcome crises. Particularly, speaking in developed nation around the world. They have plenty of resources. Due to which they can produce as vast and rapid rate.
Furthermore
,
advancement
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the advancement
of technology and machine has
also
played a major role. People are getting fat because they sit eight hours a day. Without doing any full body movement.
Therefore
, they burnt less calories in
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comparing
to that of
generation
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the generation
generations
a generation
before them.
Secondly
, they do not follow
healthy diet
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a healthy diet
healthy diets
.
Likewise
, they eat unhealthy fat food with
lot
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a lot
lots
of calories. So, not only they are
lazy but
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lazy, but
also
have a bad habit of consuming. There are
other
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also other major
also
major causes which lead us to
such
poor dieting habits of
vast majority
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a vast majority
the vast majority
. Undoubtedly, we are facing
issue
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issues
of inadequate eating,
this
issue can be resolved by government spreading awareness.
This
way people will learn about
nutritional value
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the nutritional value
and their benefits.
Also
, media and news should market healthy routine. By awakening more
crowd we
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crowd, we
can definitely can see good results. To mitigate, one should adapt healthy culture of leaving by consumption of
nutritional
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nutritious
fruits and vegetable which is good for
long and happy living
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a long and happy living
.
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