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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our times is the loss of particular species plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems It is argued that the extinction of certain kinds of species
such
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 as plants and animals is the major environmental problems. While others think that other environmental issues are more critical. I will discuss both views in
this
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 essay.
To begin
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 with, plants and animals retain balance environment in the
world
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. If they died out of the
world
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 the environment faces many difficulties.
For instance
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, the earthworm is called the plough of the farmer. The earthworm living under the soil and keep fertile, which help farmers to grow more crops. If it's extinct from the soil than farmer needs to use chemical fertilizers and create impact badly on the environment.
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, loss of some kinds of plants and animals increases the environmental problems.
On the other hand
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, there are so many significant environmental problems as like global warming and
pollution
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. The average temperature of the
world
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 is increasing day by day. After that the North Pole glaciers are melting and raising the sea level and flooding lower places. Another major problem
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 as air
pollution
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, water
pollution
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, sound
pollution
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 etc. Air
pollution
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 can cause respiratory disease and skin disease
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 as asthma.
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, WHO estimated in 2007 that air
pollution
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 causes a half million people deaths per year in India. So, there are many reasons for the environmental problems. To sum up, loses of certain plants and animals not only major cause of environmental problems but
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 it includes more problems. To prevent environmental problems people all over the
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 needs to work to save plants and animals along with preventing different pollutions
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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