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Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The pie chart illustrates the rates of destination of university
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student
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 in anthropology right after they are graduated, while the additional table compares the salaries of the three types of anthropologists employees who already worked for five years. Overall, the full-time worker became one of the biggest interest fields that the
graduate
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 anthropology
student
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 wanted to be involved, while the part-time work-post study became the lowest field of interest
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of
 the
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. After five years of working, the government sector became the highest salary types of employment for an
anthropologist
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. The full-time work field accounted for 52% of the
anthropologist
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student
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 in one university which is taking the biggest part of the destination for the
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graduate
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student
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 to start a carrier.
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, followed by part-time work at 15 %, unemployed at 12% and full-time postgraduate study and not known, which are 8% each.
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, the lowest field of destination for a fresh
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student
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 is part-time work and postgraduate study, which is only for 5%
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 in the whole university. Turning to, the salaries of
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anthropologist
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the anthropologist
anthropologists
 that worked for five years in freelance consulting accounted for 40 % for the amounts of 75,000-99,999 and 100,000 or more while the
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 of 25,000-49,999 only took 15 % of the
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 and the
range
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 of 25,00-49,999 took the smallest rates of the
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, which is only for 5%. In the other hand, 50 % of the Government sector
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 received 100,000 or more for the salaries, while only 5 % to get the
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 25,000-49,999.
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, the private company can afford 35% of their
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 to getting 50,00-74,999
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 of salary, while only 10% of them can get 50,00-74,999.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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