Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Nowadays, with the economic evolution,
entertainment field
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entertainment, field
has become one of the most paid fields (in the world
/
in comparison
/
in the industry). Indeed, some people believe that less
money
must be paid to the entertainers. From my point of view, I totally
/
absolutely agree that famous entertainers are gaining undeserved wealth.
First
of all, too much
money
is being spent on inappropriate activities. In many countries, wealth is lost on entertainment while people are starving.
For example
, In Brazil, football players receive a
high
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higher
salary which
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salary, which
reaches millions (currency? USD/$), whereas the country is facing educational, financial and medical problems.
Besides
, newspapers have shown many cases that film stars, pop musicians or sports stars have
problem
Suggestion
a problem
problems
with paying their taxes.
Hence
, entertainers take much
money
, fame, and people’s
love but
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love, but
they do not return anything back.
Secondly
, surging entertainers’ salary can assign the entertainers as a role model in the community. The new generation will have
misunderstanding
Suggestion
misunderstood
about the real role models. Teenagers may assimilate that being in the entertainment field is the most
honorable
not disposed to cheat or defraud; not deceptive or fraudulent
honourable
thing to accomplish.
However
,
that is
not true at all. In every civilization, doctors, engineers, teachers, scholars and soldiers deserve to be paid much
money
than others. These people who build the country by saving people's lives, providing infrastructure, teaching the children, searching for solutions and protecting the country from the enemy
/
defence. To conclude, I believe that entertainers’ wage
/
remuneration concept has to be rejuvenated. Less
money
should be allocated to them. Many financial issues can be mitigated if everyone takes what he truly deserves. Pay should be given to people who are improving and developing (contributing to the development) the county.
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