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Subjects like arts, music and drama are more important than other school subjects and therefore should be given more time in the calendar. Do you agree or disagree?

#subjects #arts #music #drama #school #time #calendar
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Nowadays the trend of adding after
school
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activity
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 like drama, music,
art
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 and sport in institute subjects. Some people believe that
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 is a trap designed by institute to increase the fees, but I do not agree with
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 viewpoint.
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 with, adding slots to the extracurricular
activity
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 like music, craft and drama not only helps to develop
art
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 skills, but
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 helps in mental growth, and since approves it.
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, it activates the frontal cortex of the brain, which is responsible for critical thinking which helps in complex tasks,
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 maths problems.
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, research approves that hybrid studies, like combination of
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activity
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 and traditional subject helps a person to study faster and effectively
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; A combination of history and drama, helps a child to remember history more effectively; science and lab activities are an excellent mixture to understand scientific phenomena and the easiest way to understand biology is, nature visits. Apart from the academic benefits, non-academic subjects help children alleviate the academic pressure on children. These subjects give students a break from the regular subject to develop their skills.
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schools
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 can provide a platform to the child who does not have adroitness in the study, but has dexterity in
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 activities and
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 platform can help a child to find out their interest and skill in the early stage of adolescence. To add more, early realization will help kids and parents to choose his career carefully in future. To conclude, including
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, sport and hybrid
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 in
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activity
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 helps students to develop the mind, study better and choose a career;
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 government and
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 should have to add it in modern pedagogical methods.
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