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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
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Some people believe that families should be exempted to pay
state
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education
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 related taxes if their children are enrolled
to
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in
 private
school
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. I personally disagree with
this
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 statement because the
state
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education
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system
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 is established for every
citizen
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, and it is the
obligation
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for
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of
ever
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an ever citizen
citizen
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 to pay
tax
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taxes
 as required by the country. Typically, it is the
obligation
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 of a country to provide a
state
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education
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system
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 from primary
school
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 level up to tertiary level for every
citizen
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. And it is the
obligation
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 of each
citizen
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 to pay taxes in order to support the
state
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 so that it has sufficient resource to fulfil its
obligation
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.
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, to pay for the teacher’s salary, build and maintain
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 facilities, and other supporting role to ensure the high
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education
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educational
 quality. Meanwhile the private schools which are not part of the
state
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education
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system
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, usually are established because there are demands from more affluent families who think that the
education
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 quality provided by the
state
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 schools are not adequate. These families still have the right to send their children to the
state
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school but
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school, but
 choose to send them to private
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instead
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.
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, since it is their personal decision, they are still required to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their tax requirement as a
citizen
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. In conclusion, some thought that families who did not send their children to
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school but
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school, but
 to private
school
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 should be exempted from paying taxes that support
state
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education
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system
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. I disagree with
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this because
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this, because
 paying taxes is one of the obligations of every
citizen
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 so that the country are able to provide the
education
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system
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to
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for
 every
citizen
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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