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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some people believe that families should be exempted to pay
state
education
 related taxes if their children are enrolled
to
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in
 private
school
. I personally disagree with
this
 statement because the
state
education
system
 is established for every
citizen
, and it is the
obligation
for
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of
ever
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an ever citizen
citizen
 to pay
tax
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taxes
 as required by the country. Typically, it is the
obligation
 of a country to provide a
state
education
system
 from primary
school
 level up to tertiary level for every
citizen
. And it is the
obligation
 of each
citizen
 to pay taxes in order to support the
state
 so that it has sufficient resource to fulfil its
obligation
.
For example
, to pay for the teacher’s salary, build and maintain
school
 facilities, and other supporting role to ensure the high
education
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educational
 quality. Meanwhile the private schools which are not part of the
state
education
system
, usually are established because there are demands from more affluent families who think that the
education
 quality provided by the
state
 schools are not adequate. These families still have the right to send their children to the
state
school but
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school, but
 choose to send them to private
school
instead
.
Therefore
, since it is their personal decision, they are still required to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their tax requirement as a
citizen
. In conclusion, some thought that families who did not send their children to
state
school but
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school, but
 to private
school
 should be exempted from paying taxes that support
state
education
system
. I disagree with
this because
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this, because
 paying taxes is one of the obligations of every
citizen
 so that the country are able to provide the
education
system
to
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for
 every
citizen
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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