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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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No doubt, sometimes
time
 is not favourable with people. One section of society holds
this
 notion that acceptance with
situation
Suggestion
the situation
 is the best way to tackle the hard
time
 like not
satisfaction
Suggestion
satisfied
 with their job or pocket without money.
However
, other people think that try to improve the
situation
 is the best method. In
this
 essay I will discuss both the perspectives and at the end, I will give my opinion.
First
 of all, the nation who thinks accept the
situation
 with
time
 is the way to overcome bad
time
 they think
this
 because they do not want to face the hard
time
 as well as they do not want to do the hard work to
reduce to problems
Suggestion
reduce problems
such
 as a shortage of money, job lost, or any unsatisfactory condition.
Secondly
, the bad times give tension to a
person
,
as a result
, people prefer to accept it and give up easily. A survey conducted by the BBC shows the report that about 45 percent people give up very soon in case of hard times as they do not get motivated to do better in the rest of their life. Apart from
this
, the generation who prefer to try and improve the
situation
 with
time
, these types of categories believe in hard work no matter what the condition is. The best example for
this
 is Information technology candidates as they do experiment and improve the
situation
.
Furthermore
, the motivational
person
 always prefers to experience both hard and good
time
 and they think hard times, always teach a lot of new things with new experience. Overall, well it depends upon the people and self motivation of a
person but
Accept comma addition
person, but
 according to my perspective, candidates should prefer to improve the
situation
 with
time
 as no
time
 is permanent, but with the help of hard work and good try a
person
 can improve the hard
time
 to the good
time
.
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