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Children are facing more pressures from academic, social and commercial sources. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce it?

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Due to COVID-19, Children's were not able to go schools
insted
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 they put online classes. During these times
alot
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a lot
 of students
sometimes loses
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sometimes lose
 internet connection and
similarly
 if they have any kid Brothers who wants to disturb them while they are in class which
effets
have an effect upon
affects
effects
 their grades. By having so many weekly assignments they are so much worried about grades. To Reduce all these measures, we might have a full-time professor's who can assist any student from morning to evening for certain time. Which can improve their confidence on gaining good marks. Always teacher's need to support and guide them in a positive way.
This
 way a pupil can gain more self-confidence which can gain good marks.
Also
 in class explaining them briefly with a live
examples
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example
 gives them
good view
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a good view
 to their minds. Students need to know all safety instructions about
pandamic
epidemic over a wide geographical area
pandemic
pandemics
 to stay safe and healthy. Even while they evaluate their assignments
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I
highy
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
highly
 recommend professors to consider
this
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epidemic over a wide geographical area
pandemic
 case and evaluate them in
a
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an
 easy way so a child can pass the course. By following all these steps
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can assure a
children
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child
 can get more Confidence, Good Score, Positive Thinking.
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