Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from other sources such as the internet, television. To what extent, do you agree or disagree with their opinion?

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institute is way more valuable than other learning materials. I strongly concur
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that both the accuracy of the knowledge and the development of the people who
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educated. Admittedly, I partly agree that other learning materials,
such
as the
internet
and the media will benefit
students
in a school and a University.
Students
will be extending their learning experience via various media, more specifically, if young
students
learn about an earthquake, they can gain lively instruction, including 3-dimensional images and videos through searching
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online.
As a result
, they can learn more effectively compared to the traditional way which is learning from the textbook with teachers.
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students
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required to search
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and deeper intelligence, the
internet
and television will be an essential learning method to them more than the
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professor’s lecture. They can easily access up-to-date info, especially thesis and article related to the topic that they are interested in, and
also
gain valuable
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.
Nevertheless
, I, as one of the opponents of the view, hard to agree when considering the teaching ability of instructors and the perspective of young
students
. On top of that teachers and professors are experts in each field, they have very accurate data about the subjects.
In addition
, they have special skills to teach their
students
,
for example
, they give them homework to develop the student’s own abilities and
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assessments
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the acceptance of the lecture. Another reason worth mentioning is the
information
on the
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is not accurate all the
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, researchers who looking for the appropriate knowledge should have 'data literacy' skills which are accepted only
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and true instruction
while
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, they are not mature enough to distinguish right from
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for accurate
information
on the full with false and truth of the
internet
world.
Lastly
, I want to emphasize the way to learn from the
information
on the
internet
or television cannot be applied to all
students
. In conclusion, it appears that instructors with their quality and depth of knowledge, are set to remain an integral part of the syllabus. If used carefully and under supervision, the
Internet
and television can be judged a useful supplement to it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized attention
  • immediate feedback
  • structured learning
  • curriculum
  • dynamic interaction
  • engagement
  • cognitive skills
  • access to expertise
  • specialists
  • comprehensive
  • progressively
  • digestible
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