Companies should provide sport and social facilities for local communities. To what extend do you agree?

Nowadays local
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Nowadays, local
communities with sport and social Facilities can live more easily. Companies can help local communities I completely agree with for two reasons.
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can improve the lives local communities.
Moreover poverty
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Moreover, poverty
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all people. There are many
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of they can improve the lives local communities.
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peoples'
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a shopping centre
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And thrive the communities.
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maintaining
maintain
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Moreover, poverty
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people have Enough facilities
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they will be less likely commit the crimes.
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