Universities should allocate the same amount of money to students’ sports activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree?

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Some people believe that universities should give money to sports events, as they think sport events and
library
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are the same. I cannot completely agree with
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statement. In the following paragraph, I will give some points why I think the same. I was a student once, and I know the importance of libraries in
student’s life
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a student’s life
.
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of all it is the cheapest way for any student to prepare themselves for the exams, for incoming lectures, for home works, to make research or just to read only books. From my point of view, it is important to supply
library
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new relevant books, newspaper, magazines and journals.
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, libraries are the places, where students spend their most of the
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in studying
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some most of the students use
library
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whenever there is no lecture in universities. So
library
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must be large in area to accommodate
maximum number
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the maximum number
a maximum number
of students at a single
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.
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Also it
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Also, it
is essential there should be proper ventilation and proper lighting arrangement to be made so as
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would be enable students to do their work properly. Another advantage of having good
library
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is some of the
student
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students
cannot afford to have good computer or
good
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better
internet connection. These students use these
library
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facilities to complete their work.
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Also some
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Also, some
students cannot afford some of the expensive reference books which can be easily available in the
library
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.
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, to provide these all benefits, it is essential to have good facilities in
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library
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the library
.
On the other hand
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, students are less in
number who
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number, who
plays in sports events as
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compared
to visiting
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library
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the library
. Usually, students
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go to college for graduation and
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they focus on the sports activities.
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, I must say that every university should have few playgrounds and a fitness
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
where students may have a rest after strained days. One more reason to have really good libraries is that it can save not only money but
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for students. A person has not to drive to the bookstore to get
materials
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the materials
he or she is looking for. So, a
library
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can save
time
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that
then
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can be spent on a sport. To conclude, I think libraries are the main resources of knowledge. So if universities have extra money, they should spend on buying new books, journals, magazines, new software and new equipment for
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library
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the library
.
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