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Improvements in health, education and trend are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibilities for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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While I do see why rich nations would not like to
support
 poorer
nation
,
Accept space
,
 I think government of affluent nations should help poor,
under-developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 nations. There are many reasons to
support
this
. For one thing, in today's world of
globlization
growth to a global or worldwide scale
globalization
 wherein economies of countries are so tightly coupled, it has become necessary for all countries to work hand in hand.
For instance
, taking current corona pandemic situation
,
Accept space
,
 if rich
nation
 doesn't help poor
nation
 who are deprived of better health
instrastructure
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
, the
pandamedic
epidemic over a wide geographical area
pandemic
paramedic
 can never be controlled. Humanitarian crisis
,
Accept space
,
 be in any part of
world
Suggestion
the world
 should be worked on with
joint effort
Suggestion
joint efforts
the joint effort
a joint effort
 from rich nations
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
, when you are prosperous
,
Accept space
,
 well-off it becomes moral obligation to
support
 the needy people. There is a popular saying " What is point for becoming tall like a date tree, when you do not provide shade and fruits to the needy". In summary, even if rich countries think helping poor
nation
 a daunting challenge which may
imapct
the striking of one body against another
impact
 their own growth,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 personally
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that
rich
Suggestion
rich nations
a rich nation
nation
 should
support
 poor
nation
 in
field
Suggestion
the field
 of
education, health which
Suggestion
health education, which
 is
basic necessity
Suggestion
a basic necessity
.
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