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Humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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It has been observed that
pollution
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 in our
environment
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 has been significantly increased over the past few years due to several reasons.
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 essay will discuss the role of government to control the various forms of
pollution
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 and
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 the duties of us as an individual to understand the strategies to overcome
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 huge problem.
Pollution
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 can be in many forms
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 as Air
pollution
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, Water
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, Sound
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, Soil
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 and many more. Since
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 few years, Government took some steps to control the depreciation of air, land and water quality by imposing more taxes on the manufacturing industries which emits tremendous amount of poisonous gases
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 as Carbon monoxide, Carbon dioxide which plays a major role in destroying the ozone layer which plays a vital role in protecting us from the sun’s ultraviolet radiations.
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, in my opinion it is not enough to handle the issue of the widespread
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 and government should be more involved in activities
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 as planting more and more trees, promotes green energy sources, restrict the dumping of plastic and rubbers into our ocean and
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 by giving subsidies to the projects
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 as wind power, solar power electricity generation. It is being said that the betterment of the
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 and the society as a whole depends on the decisions, we as an individual take. Decisions
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 as using public transportation rather than personal vehicle, taking care of plants and nurturing the
environment
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 by using the biodegradable plastic and other substances, buying and using more and more
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 friendly products
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 as electric vehicles, reusable water bottles and
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 by adapting to the concept of recycling through which we can reduce the amount of wastage and utilize the maximum amount of resources.
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 essay has discussed both the roles of government and individual and suggested some of the alternatives
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though, which
 we can save
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 planet from becoming
unliveable
unfit or unsuitable to live in or with
unlivable
 habitat.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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