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Violence in the media promotes violence in society. To what extend do you agree?

#violence #media #society
An important part of humans watch
tv
 and they spent a lot of time. I completely agree with the subject for two reasons.
the
Suggestion
The
 media can have bad effects On people.
other
Suggestion
Other
 people believe that watching
tv
 increase people's knowledge. There is a disadvantage the media can have bad effects On people.
Firstly
, Today, The media
is
Suggestion
are
 interested in making movies about crime and fight. So they do not care what age their audience.
This
also
 leads children under the effect of the movie.
Furthermore
, many people
can not
can not
cannot
 control their anger. So it can increase crime in society.
On the other hand
, other people believe that watching
tv
 increase people's knowledge.
the
Suggestion
The
 media
is
Suggestion
are
 very effective for people. The producer creates a program with the scientific subject, can influence people.
This
 leads to increasing information and knowledge. I completely agree with the subject for people to spend a lot of time watching
tv
Suggestion
TV
.
This
 leads to human under the effect media and there is no supervision to create the movie.
Submitted by mohammad khan mohammadi on

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