More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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currently
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Currently
, there are more and more people make a decision not to bear offsprings when they are young and wait until they get older.
in
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In
this
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essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to give some reasons for
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and in my opinion, there would be more negative impacts than positive ones.
there
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There
are some reasons for
this
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trend.
due
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Due
to the rapid development of the world, people have to work harder in order to contribute to their nations.
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as
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As
a result, people are too busy and do not have much time to take care of their children.
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similarly
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Similarly
, the world is advanced, which leads to more expensive equipments for child-rearing.
people
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People
before having a child, have been used to a
freedom
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freer
life where they spend everything on themselves.
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therefore
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Therefore
, they might not ready for looking after a child.
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however
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However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would argue that
this
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trend might have
more more negative
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more negative
influences than positive counterparts.
because
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Because
of having later age pregnancy, there would be some negative impacts on their children.
according
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According
to
reasearch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
researches
researcher
, pregnancy after 35 may lead to autism,
disablility
the condition of being unable to perform as a consequence of physical or mental unfitness
disability
, impaired cognition.
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this
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This
leads to
childern
a young person of either sex
children
grow up might be a burden to the society.
having
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Having
children in their later age might
also
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cause a significant gap between two generations.
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as
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As
a result, parents might experience hard time to understand and communicate with their
offsrings
the immediate descendants of a person
offsprings
offerings
.
if
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If
parents bear offsprings when they were young, there would not have any generation gaps.
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In
in conclusion, there are many reasons why people prefer having children when they
get older
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older, however
however
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this
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could lead to generation gap and physical disorders in the
next
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generation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • delaying parenthood
  • financial stability
  • career advancement
  • personal goals
  • higher education
  • fertility treatments
  • relationship stability
  • health care improvements
  • personal development
  • postponing children
  • achieve milestones
  • family planning
  • modern society
  • life expectancy
  • paternal and maternal age
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