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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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currently
Suggestion
Currently
, there are more and more people make a decision not to bear offsprings when they are young and wait until they get older.
in
Suggestion
In
this
 essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to give some reasons for
this
 and in my opinion, there would be more negative impacts than positive ones.
there
Suggestion
There
 are some reasons for
this
 trend.
due
Suggestion
Due
 to the rapid development of the world, people have to work harder in order to contribute to their nations.
as
Suggestion
As
 a result, people are too busy and do not have much time to take care of their children.
similarly
Suggestion
Similarly
, the world is advanced, which leads to more expensive equipments for child-rearing.
people
Suggestion
People
 before having a child, have been used to a
freedom
Suggestion
freer
 life where they spend everything on themselves.
therefore
Suggestion
Therefore
, they might not ready for looking after a child.
however
Suggestion
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would argue that
this
 trend might have
more more negative
Suggestion
more negative
 influences than positive counterparts.
because
Suggestion
Because
 of having later age pregnancy, there would be some negative impacts on their children.
according
Suggestion
According
 to
reasearch
systematic investigation to establish facts
research
researches
researcher
, pregnancy after 35 may lead to autism,
disablility
the condition of being unable to perform as a consequence of physical or mental unfitness
disability
, impaired cognition.
this
Suggestion
This
 leads to
childern
a young person of either sex
children
 grow up might be a burden to the society.
having
Suggestion
Having
 children in their later age might
also
 cause a significant gap between two generations.
as
Suggestion
As
 a result, parents might experience hard time to understand and communicate with their
offsrings
the immediate descendants of a person
offsprings
offerings
.
if
Suggestion
If
 parents bear offsprings when they were young, there would not have any generation gaps.
Suggestion
In
 in conclusion, there are many reasons why people prefer having children when they
get older
Accept comma addition
older, however
however
this
 could lead to generation gap and physical disorders in the
next
 generation
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