Many people think that more money will make them more happy.how important is money for happiness? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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will made them happier. In
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they can buy
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displaying luxury and furnishing gratification to the senses
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car and houses.
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, they can
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help needy people, by giving them
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or things which can help them in difficult times.
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destinations with
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can live their life with peace and harmony.
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any, natural
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said that
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makes the mare go.
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hand, money
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will only complete the daily
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needs of
our life. But it cannot buy our happiness and love.
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Moreover people
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is working, day and night to collect
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for their family and they do not enjoy their life
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money
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can not
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satisfy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subjective
  • universally
  • cultural differences
  • psychological factors
  • satisfaction with life
  • emotional balance
  • personal achievements
  • social connections
  • fulfilling relationships
  • sense of belonging
  • sense of purpose
  • physical health
  • well-being
  • financial stability
  • mindfulness
  • gratitude
  • positive thinking
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