One of your friends is interested in studying abroad but confused about which course to opt for. Write a letter to your friend and in your letter: Explain which course to choose. Explain why this course is best. Invite your friend to discuss in person.

Dear Smith, I hope
this
letter will find you in the pink of your health. I am glad to hear that you are interested in
coming
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tocoming

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Canada for studies and I know you are confused about which
course
to select. I am writing
this
letter to recommend you a
course
in Information Technology provided by Sun Microsystem. As you may be aware that Sun Microsystem is a software platform and their software programs are installed in almost every multinational company.
Moreover
, they
also
provide
placement
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guarantee after the
course
completion.
Therefore
, by enrolling in
this
course
you will have bright chances of working in a High tech organisation. As there
are
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is

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vacation
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on vacation

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currently in Italy, I would like to invite you
at
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to

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my place. Once you will be here I will provide
the
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apply

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detailed information about
this
course
. I believe
,
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apply

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I would be able to explain more about
this
course
once you will be here in person.
Also
, I will take you to beautiful and historic places
of
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in

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this
city. Hope to see you soon Cheers!! Donald Trump
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