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You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened, and that you want your money back. Things to include: – Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. – Polite. No one responds to insults. – Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? – Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

#restaurant #manager #money #facts #insults #outline #firmness
Dear Johnson, I am writing
this
 letter to share my recent experience at your restaurant which was terrible.
Last
 week, I had arranged a dinner party at your restaurant for my office personnel. I reserved the table for 10 people a day before, but the table was not prepared on time and nobody informed me.
Moreover
, the dishes were not as good as it used to be. I believe the quality of the food has come down after the recent change in management. My manager and his clients did not like the food and I was being fired for
such
 reason. I would like you to refund my full money that was spent on that day and a complimentary dinner in order to compensate the situation. I believe
this
 should be done on a serious note if you want to continue the business through our office else
this
 relationship can be ended at
this
 point. Thank you for your kind attention. I am looking forward to your reply. Regards, Barry Richardson
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