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The line graph given shows the consumption of fast food by Australian teens between 1975 and 2000; 25 year distance. Here Pizza and hamburgers continued to be consumed more than

fish

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and chips consumed in high quantities in 1975, but after that, the levels dropped slowly. In 1975 for the

first

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time, Australian teenagers consumed

fish

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and chips in a high percentage which was about 100 times eaten, while

on the other hand

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, the hamburger and the pizza ratio in 1975 was only 5 times which illustrates that their level of eating is less than the others. After that from 1980 to 1985, the ratio of

fish

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& chips for eating dropped compared to pizza and hamburgers, which showed a high ratio in Australian teens. After 1985 onwards, the proportion of

fish

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and potato chips went down and down in Australian teens while

on the other hand

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Pizza and hamburgers became prominent and the percentage of their meal grew at the top level. And

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one can say that hamburgers rank higher in eating compared to others among Australian teens. And the hamburger graph line is right above the remaining lines. So from

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, we conclude that Australian teenagers are more interested in

fish

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and chips than others. Meanwhile, after a few years they are more interested in hamburgers and

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interested in pizza.

This

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is clearly justified from the graph line.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

232 words

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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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