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Many people believe that big businesses in addition to generating profits should be involved in and responsible for the social life of the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Many nations have
a
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an
 idea about the big enterprise, some people think that only profit while others believe that they should provide
community
service
 and help to the people. According to my view, they have
bigger responsibility
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a bigger responsibility
 to give public services to the people.
First
 of all, any enterprise
think
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thinks
 their main goal as a profit,
however
, they may provide
service
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Service
 and goods only maintaining a
best
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better
 society and environment. It means that company me be protected only protecting society and
community
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the community
.
Therefore
, businesses have to think not only income but
also
community
 and social services. Large multinational companies
for instance
, allocate
considerable portion
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a considerable portion
for
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of
community
service
 from their budget.
In addition
, it is
helpful work
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a helpful work
 for the people because of there are many
help less
lacking in or deprived of strength or power
helpless
 people
live
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living
 in the world and
companies if do
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if companies do
 not help
to
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with
 them, they become helpless nations.
Secondly
, nowadays, most of
service
 providers and merchant hold best name in
global market
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the global market
. They give funds for sports and environmental works which call indirect marketing. Advertise is
very important thing
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a very important thing
 for
improve
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improving
improved
 their sales.
if
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If
 one business
think
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thinks
 only their net profit, they cannot go to among the people Organizations earn huge consumer ratings from those kind of jobs. Coca Cola
company
Accept comma addition
company, for
for example
, sponsor many social activities all over the world and they gather dominating consumers. To sum up, many businessmen believe that keep not only
earnings but
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earnings, but
earning but
earning earning but
also
 provide social and
community
 activities from the dominating enterprise. Personally, I think that
business
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businesses
a business
 should consider both areas.
Submitted by Sumedha wijesekara on

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