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the percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last 10 years. discuss the causes and the effects of this disturbing trend?

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Recently, researchers have shown that just in a decade, the proportion of obesity in children in the western world has surged by 10%. Many reasons could surface for
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 some distinct influences can be expected. Both the root causes as well as the impact are elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs.
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, sedentary lifestyle is a maniac to the growing generation. Eventually, the
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 of the twenties has changed from hard work and earn to sit at earn. The
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 of 10 to 20 in which they should run out of the house and play on the ground, they prefer to stay inside and watch their favourite show with popcorn or chips on hand. More the period of sitting, the lesser the time of physical exhaustion. Nowadays, apart from walking down the street for groceries, child prefers to use an electric bike or a car if fall under the
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. The
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 now since few years includes more of a rest than sweating. Wrong food habits, filling stomach with the slice of pizza when you can have a vegetable filled taco. Reduced time for self and more of the span for a bright future, has caged a person from a young
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 to easily available frozen food and hand outs from Mc Donalds or dominos.
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the consequences are not better. To the formation of good
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 and not focusing of the increasing fats has led to problems like hypertension and heart attack. The brain disorders like amnesia, depression and many more are
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 linked to the diet of the individual at a very young
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. Cancer at early forties due to enjoyment of
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 at twenties. Health is wealth is an old saying, which is not followed now. All in one, it is crucial to maintain health to live
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 to the fullest at home with loved ones, rather than spending the ending of
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the last few days
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 on the hospital bed. As the problem of the increase in weight has worse effects.
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