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In some parts of the world it is becoming increasingly popular to research the history of one’s own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Finding one's ancestry is becoming increasingly popular in some parts of the world.
This
 essay will discuss why people do
this
 and will propose that it is a positive development. People are often attracted to new gadgets or applications introduced in the market. Technological advancement has led to a plethora of new applications invented every day. It is not uncommon for a new application or a website to find more users during the initial years after its launch. It is because people find them interesting as they were non-existent a few years ago.
For instance
, the application, "
MyAncestry
Suggestion
My Ancestry
.
com
Suggestion
Come
Com
" has millions of subscribers, thousands of them have found their lineage through the site According to reports in the "Business magazine", the rate of people subscribing has gone down considerably in the initial years after its launch. It is due to the initial excitement people have in uncovering the potential of a new application.
This
 is a positive development because it creates a sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 and unity, knowing that we were all once settlers in Africa, and moved to different parts of the world in search of greener pastures.
Also
, knowing that one's ancestors were from Africa, one might plan to visit the place.
This
 will promote tourism and will lead to economic growth in the region. There will be a greater sense of bonding among people as they realize that they are not different, but were related to each other at some point in time. In conclusion, more and more people nowadays resort to finding their family history. It is because of their interest in new technologies and their potentials. It is a positive development as it creates a sense of brotherhood among people.
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