Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

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modern era, high profile people are becoming popular with the masses just because of their alluring and charismatic personality. The crowd starts following their idols blindly which in turn plays havoc with their own persona and sets a wrong precedence for the coming generation..

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essay will discuss about the unnecessary hype

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about

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and upper class status without knowing the harmful effects on society and I strongly support

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opinion. In present scenario,

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the actors

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wrong activities like smoking, drinking and partying late night. They have a misconception that they can do anything in the name of celebrity status and with their

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power. Supporting different looks and enticing the innocent people with their display of

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has become a trend

nowdays

the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech

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. Most of us know that Salman Khan had killed people on footpath while he was drunk and later on he got saved because of his status and

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era, what we see is what we believe. Our young generation is taking our industry people as their role models. They have devalued our traditional cultures and respect for their elders

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why young ones are

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arguing with their parents. These famous people must behave in a responsible manner towards the society. The yesteryear actors were so much dedicated towards their roles and how they impact their generation in

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a positive manner

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essay discussed the unnecessary show off of name and fame and blind imitation of superstars which has created a mess for youngsters.

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is the high time we should wake up and give importance to our valued culture and traditions of which I am an inseparable part.

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

In recent years, the structure of a family and the role of its members are gradually band changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

A friend has invited you to a party, but you are busy on the day it’s being held. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Apologies for not being able to attend • Explain why you are busy • Invite your friend to do something else with you