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some think that economic progress is totally dependent on the country’s success while others believe that other factors are also important.what are the different factors contributing to the success of a country? Do you believe that only one factor is important,compared to others.

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It is a controversial issue
of
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in
 today’s world because few
group
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groups
 of people think financial conditions of
country
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the country
 is the key to measure about nation’s success status or some are
opine
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opining
 that and said other factors are
also
 important.
However
, I personally believe that other ways are necessary as well, to say about any county’s success rather than discuss about only economic conditions. Primarily, other factors
such
 as health facility, transport facility , education and so on, are equally important because if any
country
’s education facility is good
then
 it put positive impact on the illiteracy rate of that
country
, which helps to boost the economy status of
country
 due to the literate people of
country
 will do business,government jobs and private jobs so from their small part of earnings, government take money in the form of tax.
Secondly
, Cuba
,
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,
 as an example, is only the
country
 which
provide
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provides
 approximately 70-80% top class doctors
to
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in
 the whole world because of their strongest education system and in
this
 epidemic time, official authorities of cube sent a team of 100 doctors to treat a Covid-19 to Italy and other countries to tackle the problem of pandemic. Paradoxically, Anyone can not ignore the importance of economy to measure a successful status of the
country
 owing to if any
country
 has better financial
conditions
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conditions, then
then
 the government of that
country
 can provide better facilities to their
vulnerable
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most vulnerable
such
 as medical facilities.
For example
, developed countries
such
 as United States of America, Europeon countries and so on, are providing a better medical facilities, transportation facilities and
also
 giving better retirement plans to their inhabitants as compare to developing countries like as India , Pakistan and many more, it’s only possible because developed nations has strong economic profile. In conclusion, from all above the
facts it
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facts, it
 is crystal clear that discuss about only one factor is not a good way to tell about any
country
 is it a
successful
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success
 or not because other factors are
also
has
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having
 great impact on the economy of
country
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the country
a country
 so no one can ignore these factors before saying about
nations
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nation's
nations'
 success.
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