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Prisons are an expensive way of making bad people worse , To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that
jail
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time
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 can put negative impact on the convict’s lives as they are surrounded by criminal people all the
time
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. I partially espouse to
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 statement.
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,
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 essay will discuss the to what are the conditions which a
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 will experience.
First
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 and foremost, convicts get
time
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 to realize the after effects of their
crime
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. It is true that prisoners get a lot of
time
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 to think of their mistakes when they receive a verdict to spend years in
jail
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 for the
crime
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 they committed. Spending lots of
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 in prison gets them frustrated and they realize to improve and be law abiding citizen. Not only that, they
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 get duties in different departments like cleaning, cooking, carpentering and so on, from which they earn little
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an
 amount from
jail
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 authorities.
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This
 process teaches them to become self independent and work to earn money.
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, in some situation individual prisoners get involved in bad company and make small gangs in prison and become more aggressive and danger. After completing their
time
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 they again follow the same path of
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. To
concude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
coincide
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, prison affects prisoners in different manners. Some people get worse in
jail
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 and other improve,
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, punishment is necessary for crimes. Citizen must have a sense of fear and it will
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 help to decrease the
crime
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 rate.
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