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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree.

#prison #countries #crime #people #education
Well behaviour people are very important and most valuable thing
to
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for
 a
country
.In my view every
country
 in the world
have
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has
 different categories of people.
some
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Some
 people are good some people are bad and majority of them are middleweight of the good and bad. Any period of time the majority good that
country
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the country
 is very peaceful and it’s strong with the economy
also
.
Lot
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A lot
 of countries use the prison for bad peoples who are doing the
crime
.
That is
 the common way to solve the
crime
 cases in the
country
.
some
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Some
 people are saying better education can
changing
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change
 the people and it is reducing the
crime
 frequency of a
country
.In my opinion is education can’t totally change those
crime
 cases. Because
lot
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a lot
 of well educated white
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 job holders doing
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a lot
lots
 of
crime
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 well educated guys. Following that details we can’t fully agree
to
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with
this
 statement. Education can change the mind of the people. In that case not only education can change the
crime
 cases, people need equality
,
Accept space
,
good social environment
,
Accept space
,
good
in come
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income
.
Accept space
.
 Any
country
 can maintain
this
 main
categories
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category
 with developing the humanities, I think we can reduce the
crime
 cases. We can’t stop the criminals in a
country
, it’s happening any time in any place. It’s the nature of a social system. If some
crime
is happen
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happens
,
best solution
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the best solution
 is the prison. He or she
done
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has done
did
 a
crime
, consequence is very disastrous, it is the prison.
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  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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