Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

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society that whether, women are better than men when they take care of their

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children, hence

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that would be their primary concern rather than

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statement due to the financial independence is much need in the modern economic terms of any part the world

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just for looking after the children would not be an ideal option. Predominantly

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it is observed that women are better than men when compared to nurture their babies

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Since, mothers are benevolent in nature and carrying their baby's prenatal they are more affectionate towards their

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having said that, many new studies prove that the determining factor of love hormones exotoxin realising at the same level for

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mother and father

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we cannot say that only mothers are affectionate to their

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contemporary era,

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men and women are

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driven due to the financial needs and

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women are far more educated than previous decades

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they cannot just leave the

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to look after the babies.

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men and women are getting paternity and maternity paid leaves respectively to look after the

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, it would not be a problem for

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parents to take care their

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child

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child, hence

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tendency could act as a catalyst for empowering women and

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, in many developed countries,

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the parent taking responsibility to look after the

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child, hence the

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the standard of living is high compared to the women who living in the country common mentality has an aversion to the

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enthusiasts women. In conclusion,

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many argue that women need to leave the job for

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care since they are quintessential as mothers than father

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in my opinion, it would not be a good practise to leave the

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since the world needs more participation from women and especially it is vital to empower the women to thrive in

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modern day.