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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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With the rapidly increasing
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, It can be seen that people's life is much easier than ever before, in terms of communication, entertainment, work activities and in so many other aspects. There are so many advantages and disadvantages of
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 new development of information
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technology but
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technology, but
 benefits can be outweighed by the drawbacks and I will discuss those reasons in detail here.
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, the advancement of information
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 helps people to come closer virtually. A human can talk to anyone by only sending a text from his mobile to anywhere in the world. The development of Navigation
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 very useful in order to explore the world without someone else's help.
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, a person can work from home due to the elevation of technological benefits. Finding the job has been much easier nowadays by just searching on the internet.
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, our houses are like full of gadgets now a days. Television, mobile phones and Personal computers like important members of our home. Leisure activities are very easily accessible.
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, a man can enjoy the views of nature by only sitting in his living room via virtual reality glasses or play so many indoor or even outdoor games with having any real parts. There are
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 many disadvantages of
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. The cybercrime is one of the most illegal crimes in today's world. Hackers can steal the personal data from person's account, blackmail someone by using that or even smuggle bank details and can perform the cyber heist. To conclude, there are both advantages and disadvantages for using machinery. But drawbacks can be reduced by one's awareness and by learning the safe use of information
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 while there are enormous benefits from it.
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