Many people believe that we should protect all wanimals while others believe we should just protect some of them

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People’s opinions differ as to whether all the existing the
species
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of animals should be preserved equally. While it is believed that we should only focus on certain animals, In my opinion all animal
species
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should receive equal protection. On the one hand, certain animals are more important in the environment and ought to be prioritised over others. Kangaroos and Koalas
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, can only survive and breed in Australian grounds,
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making Australia special place and famous for taking care of these two
species
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.
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, relocation of those animals in other parts of the world might result in the loss of the
species
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and breeding programs in other areas are
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likely to go in vain. It is
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important that Kangaroo and Koala
species
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stay in Australia and more funding should go to preserving them in Australia alone.
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,
however
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, animal rights are equal for all animals and
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each deserves equal protection for 2 clear reasons. It is against animal rights to group animal
species
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into more important or less important. Each and every animal has its unique characteristic and role in the environment.
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, if kangaroos are special and belong to Australia only, domestic dogs can be regarded equally important for being safeguards of people.
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, all animals should be given equal attention. In conclusion,
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particular animal
species
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can be seen as more special, I believe that all the existing animals need to be protected equally.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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