The mass media, including television, radio, and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The mass media, including television, radio, and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Studies have shown that newspapers and television stations play a dominant role in a society, and their dominance comes from audiences and viewers. I am inclined to believe that
media
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the media
has its negative aspects which prevail over the positive ones. I fully endorse that the power media conquers people’s mindset. In the following lines, a thorough presentation of my perspective will be discussed in detail.
First
of all, one of the negative points of media is that it is controlled by the government and it is used as a tool for disseminating propaganda or faking news.
In other words
, if the government wants to divert audiences away from political issues, scandals will be released by the government through televisions programs or newspapers.
This
can be witnessed in the United States where its president’s reputation had been maligned by his opponents because of political matters, and
this
a scandal published in newspapers and television stations.
This
example shows that visualize programs can affect laymen’s opinion and leak shameful secrets.
continuing
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Continuing
with the drawbacks, celebrities have been using social media and talk shows to bully or gossip. To clarify, after a renowned one was attacked by the
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
, the audiences would invasive
this
person without any compassion, and they would start harassing.
For example
, posting fake pictures and unreal stories are typical examples of how can the mass media publish lying things
on
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to
innocent people and it causes deleterious effects on their personal life that can result in devastating their personality.
Thus
, not only do televised programs and radio deteriorate one’s life, but they
also
publish a slander on people. To conclude, having explained my stance above, it can be reiterated that all types of communication give invariably a negative impact on people. Our Dear IELTS Candidates, -To check our comments, you are kindly requested to download the
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This
means that the topic must be fully covered with
explanation
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an explanation
and support, and the opinion is clearly presented.
covers
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Covers
the requirements of the task presents a clear overview of
main trends
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the main trends
, differences or stages
presents
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Presents
a clear purpose, with the tone consistent and appropriate
clearly
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Clearly
presents key features Cohesion and Coherence Band 7 There is a clear progression of ideas throughout the essay. There is no overuse or underuse of connectors. ƒ logically organizes information and
ideas
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Ideas
; there is clear progression
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Throughout
ƒ uses a
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of cohesive devices
appropriately
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Appropriately
although
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Some
under-use ƒ presents a clear central
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Each
paragraph Lexical Resources
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B and
6 A wide
range
of vocabulary and no errors in spelling, collocation or
word
formation. Avoid lexical repetition.
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Uses
a wide
range
of vocabulary for the task ƒ attempts to use less common
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Vocabulary
but with some inaccuracy
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Makes
some errors in
word
formation, and
word
choice, but they
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Do
not impede communication Grammatical
Range
and Accuracy Band 6 There is good control of grammar and punctuation marks along with a variety of sentence structures (
such
as if conditional).
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Uses
a variety of complex structures
produces
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Produces
frequent error-free sentences
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Has
good control of grammar and punctuation;
however
, a few errors are found.
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