The mass media, including television, radio, and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The mass media, including television, radio, and newspapers, have great influence in shaping people's ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Studies have shown that newspapers and television stations play a dominant role in a society, and their dominance comes from audiences and viewers. I am inclined to believe that

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the media

has its negative aspects which prevail over the positive ones. I fully endorse that the power media conquers people’s mindset. In the following lines, a thorough presentation of my perspective will be discussed in detail.

First

of all, one of the negative points of media is that it is controlled by the government and it is used as a tool for disseminating propaganda or faking news.

In other words

, if the government wants to divert audiences away from political issues, scandals will be released by the government through televisions programs or newspapers.

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can be witnessed in the United States where its president’s reputation had been maligned by his opponents because of political matters, and

this

a scandal published in newspapers and television stations.

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example shows that visualize programs can affect laymen’s opinion and leak shameful secrets.

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with the drawbacks, celebrities have been using social media and talk shows to bully or gossip. To clarify, after a renowned one was attacked by the

influencers

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influences

, the audiences would invasive

this

person without any compassion, and they would start harassing.

For example

, posting fake pictures and unreal stories are typical examples of how can the mass media publish lying things

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innocent people and it causes deleterious effects on their personal life that can result in devastating their personality.

Thus

, not only do televised programs and radio deteriorate one’s life, but they

also

publish a slander on people. To conclude, having explained my stance above, it can be reiterated that all types of communication give invariably a negative impact on people. Our Dear IELTS Candidates, -To check our comments, you are kindly requested to download the

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means that the topic must be fully covered with

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an explanation

and support, and the opinion is clearly presented.

covers

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Covers

the requirements of the task presents a clear overview of

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the main trends

, differences or stages

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Presents

a clear purpose, with the tone consistent and appropriate

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presents key features Cohesion and Coherence Band 7 There is a clear progression of ideas throughout the essay. There is no overuse or underuse of connectors. ƒ logically organizes information and

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Ideas

; there is clear progression

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Throughout

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Appropriately

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under-use ƒ presents a clear central

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paragraph Lexical Resources

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6 A wide

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of vocabulary and no errors in spelling, collocation or

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formation. Avoid lexical repetition.

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Uses

a wide

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Vocabulary

but with some inaccuracy

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Makes

some errors in

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not impede communication Grammatical

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and Accuracy Band 6 There is good control of grammar and punctuation marks along with a variety of sentence structures (

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as if conditional).

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a variety of complex structures

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Produces

frequent error-free sentences

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Has

good control of grammar and punctuation;

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, a few errors are found.

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Limit The essay should

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