Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. Discuss both views

Getting a well-paid
job
has become easier in recent years due to the emergence of new professions
.
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.
However
, while some believe that graduating a tertiary education can ensure having
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a good
job
, I agree with those who feel that gaining
work
experience immediately after school could bring more advantages. On the one hand, it could be argued that having a
university
diploma could guarantee getting a lucrative
job
. Those who support that a person who has graduated a
university
say that, he or she is able to become a competitive candidate to get a
job
from
particular organization
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particular organizations
a particular organization
the particular organization
as employers are commonly accept people who have had
education background
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an education background
which was specialized to specific sphere
.
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.
Moreover
, people who have completed a
university
are said to be able to predict a setback of their future actions in workplace situations which makes them more likely to be employed owing to the fact that not every company is ready to educate their
employers
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
and give them a chance to learn from their mistakes.
However
, I believe that there are more arguments to suggest that starting working after school could be better. One issue is that
university
students are mainly taught theory. Due to
this
students
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student
often could not use their the theoretical knowledge in practice which give rise to the problem of being not capable of implementing a given task in the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
. Even worse, there could be changes in
decision
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the decision
of a student who was already applied to a
university
to change his future
career but
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career, but
he or she has already spent more than 4 years there. It
could be seem
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could seem
to be a waste of time to have a tertiary education if a student does not know which
career
path suits him. In comparison, an individual who started working after school had an opportunity to try
diversity
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a diversity
of jobs and gain
work
experience with creating a base of his future
career
which would be the best to him. In conclusion,
although
it could be possible to have a good
job
after completing a
university
.
Therefore
, on balance, I believe that gaining
work
experience earlier could raise the chance to have a better
career
path.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized expertise
  • on-the-job training
  • work experience
  • financial independence
  • career growth
  • hands-on experience
  • balanced perspective
  • internships
  • part-time work
  • academic learning
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career goals
  • individual aptitudes
  • well-paying careers
  • satisfying careers
  • specialized training
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