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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration for many. Others, however, prefer different other aspects of a job over the salary they earn. In your opinion what are the most important aspects of a job?

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A majority of our life
is spend
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spends
are spent
are spending
spend
 on working. Some people think that when it comes to choosing a job the amount of income is the most important aspect. While, others argue that there are other factors, which are more important to consider. In my opinion, salary is the most important factor and I will discuss my reasons in
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 of all, the prominent effect of a positive work environment is undeniable. It is that being surrounded by professional and knowledgeable colleagues would be a significant motivator and
individuals
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individuals'
individual
individual's
 skills could be improved noticeably by working with
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 people.
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, the other great merit of with being in a positive
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 would be being able to trust your co-workers and receiving the support that you need from them.
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, there are many problems if you don’t get paid enough. If individuals do not earn as much money as they need for their living, they will have to always struggle with their financial problems.
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 would cause them to experience a huge amount of stress, which could affect their health and happiness.
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, I remember one of my friends who had a good
manager but
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manager, but
 he was unable to pay her as much as she deserved and she was very unhappy with her life in that time period. In conclusion, there are quite important aspects to consider when it comes to choosing a job, but I would say that the amount of salary is the most important one since it is impossible to have a good life when you cannot effort your simplest expenditures.
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