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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram is comparing Grange Park’s
map
 details in 1920 and today. Overall, it can be concluded that the location of
this
 park is remained at the same place, in between Arnold avenue and Eldon street;
however
 many changes happened over
this
 period.
First
, by looking at the left half of the
map
, it can be seen that the stage for musicians was demolished and now has been replaced by an Amphitheatre.
Moreover
, there are no seating sites anymore. Regarding to the rest of the changes, at the middle of the
map
, the fountain is replaced by a square shape rose garden, which surrounded by seats.
Furthermore
, the rose garden and the pond, at the northeast of the
map
 are replaced by a cafe and a children's play area, respectively.
Finally
, by looking at the southeast corner of
map
Suggestion
the map
, there was a
glasshouse
Suggestion
glass house
 in 1920, which is knocked-down and a water feature is built
instead
.
Additionally
, there is an entrance underground car park now, which was not existed in 1920.
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