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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people lives. Other think that adults life brings more happiest, in spite of great responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Teenage years and adult
life
 are
both
 phases of a person's
life
. The experience in
both
 the phases
are filled
Suggestion
is filled
 with moments of happiness and joy. I personally feel that teenage years are the best days of one's
life
.
This
 essay will discuss
both
 the sides of the argument. Adulthood is filled with responsibilities and there is a sense of constant chase for happiness.
This
 is mainly because adults give more importance to a high-paying job, social security and family
life
. If any of these are affected or does not meet the expectations, it
immesely impacts
Suggestion
has immensely impacted
immensely impacts
 their happiness. A high pay job demands more work which affects the work
life
 balance.
Although
 it does provide some luxuries in
life
, people end up not having time for their hobbies and passion. Teenage years
is filled
Suggestion
are filled
 with new experiences and fun. Teenagers spend most of their time with friends and
hangout
Suggestion
hang out
 to discover new things. They have ample amount of time and
hence
 develop new hobbies. Since they do not have the
responsibilties
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
responsibility
 to feed a family or pay the bills, they live a carefree
life
.
This
 phase is
also
 instrumental in moulding the personality of an individual. To conclude,
both
 teenage years and adult
life
is filled
Suggestion
are filled
 with experiences. Teenagers enjoy the most as they are young, wild and free to the world of
possibilties
a future prospect or potential
possibilities
 whereas adults feel they are obliged to act
maturley
in a mature manner
maturely
naturally
 to all situations in
life
. One cannot neglect the fact that finances play a major role in adult
life
 and freedom in teenage
life
. So the younger days are the best days of one's
life
.
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