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Today, many people do not realize how important the natural world is. Why is this How can people learn more about the importance of the natural world?

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The environment surrounding people's lives played always the pivotal role
on
Suggestion
in
 their resistance.
However
, the majority of the population have never been thinking how to save it bitterly.
This
 essay will examine the cause of people's careless towards nature and suggest a solution.
To begin
 with, it is undeniable that with the change of generations, discarding the garbage on the streets or even into the water are becoming widespread. In fact, those who are negligent to the surroundings, cannot realize the strength of damage to the Earth and its habitants. To illustrate, the Pacific ocean is the most polluted place in the world, there are 3.5 million trash and the 80% of them consist plastic. Not only are people ruining the environment through their actions, yet
also
 they are preventing fishes reproducing. Another interesting fact is that with the combined efforts of government and society people could avoid the rate of pollution. With
this
 in mind it is frequently noted that human actions are the main cause of the worldwide problem the contamination. As an example, people could investigate the novel
phorum
the phonological or orthographic sound or appearance of a word that can be used to describe or identify something
form
 "environmental friendly" through which they will become team up and help one another.
Moreover
, it might recharge population's relationships among. To conclude, from the aforementioned it is clear that just with the strong willings humanity can save their habitat. From my standpoint, it would be better if people acted together.
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