Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other ,while others think that people have became more independent . Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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are living in a world of cross cut technology
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People are divided on the opinion that humans are more reliant on themselves
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however
others believe that we are more self sufficient
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This
essay will discuss both opinions and I personally side with the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
view. On one hand
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As a result
of
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technology people can live alone
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For example
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if a person need to pay their bills
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they can do it online without any human interaction
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As even the computer guide them if they
do
engage in
make
any mistake
also
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Similarly
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edcation
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
made it possible for people to be more
indepedent
free from external control and constraint
independent
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they can easily grasp information without the use of any
second
person's help
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Also
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the global world created more job opportunities
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hence
many people can stand by themselves by doing a job in any field
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so that the necessity of financial
dependancy
the state of relying on or being controlled by someone or something else
dependency
dependence
among family members
also
not needed
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On the other hand
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it is impossible for any person to be independent as people are connected with each other
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To illustrate
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a working mother cannot handle her baby
alone they
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alone, they
definitely require human help to look after their baby like grandparents or a baby sitter
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Moreover
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many humans are working 24x7 to safeguard as
eventhough
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even though
we may not
seen
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see
them
such
as the professionals like software engineers and
technitions
someone whose occupation involves training in a specific technical process
technicians
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To conclude
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despite with the help of technology and education people can be independent
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but people are always connected without any direct contact
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Therefore i
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Therefore, I
Therefore I
believe humans cannot progress without the help of others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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