Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other ,while others think that people have became more independent . Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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are living in a world of cross cut technology

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People are divided on the opinion that humans are more reliant on themselves

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however

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others believe that we are more self sufficient

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This

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essay will discuss both opinions and I personally side with the

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referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

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view. On one hand

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technology people can live alone

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if a person need to pay their bills

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they can do it online without any human interaction

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As even the computer guide them if they

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edcation

the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill

education

made it possible for people to be more

indepedent

free from external control and constraint

independent

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they can easily grasp information without the use of any

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person's help

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the global world created more job opportunities

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many people can stand by themselves by doing a job in any field

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so that the necessity of financial

dependancy

the state of relying on or being controlled by someone or something else

dependency

dependence

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not needed

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it is impossible for any person to be independent as people are connected with each other

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To illustrate

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a working mother cannot handle her baby

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alone, they

definitely require human help to look after their baby like grandparents or a baby sitter

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many humans are working 24x7 to safeguard as

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even though

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see

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as the professionals like software engineers and

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someone whose occupation involves training in a specific technical process

technicians

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To conclude

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despite with the help of technology and education people can be independent

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but people are always connected without any direct contact

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believe humans cannot progress without the help of others.

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Topic Vocabulary:

interdependence
globalization
technological advancements
collective action
digital evolution
minimal reliance
direct interaction
empowered
access to technology
societal expectations
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Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other ,while others think that people have became more independent . Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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