Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, when the earth

become

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becomes

more spherical, the system of

employement

the state of being employed or having a job

employment

changes. People, who have ability of some

jobs or

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jobs, or

are

achievement

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achievable

achieved

and live in a poor country, are hired from oversea countries. In

this

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essay,

Firstly

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, the

govenments

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

governments

of the states have some

responbilities

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibilities

such

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as provide good education system.

Therefore

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, upon looking at the life of people, we see that the

ministery

religious ministers collectively (especially Presbyterian)

ministry

minister

of education pay lots of money

for

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raise only a person from infant to mature.

However

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, if they want to go abroad for

job

Suggestion

a job

, the amount of dollars goes to the rubbish because they could not do anything for their hometowns.

Nevertheless

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, they spend their time and

acknowleades

declare to be true or admit the existence or reality or truth of

acknowledges

to increase strange countries.

On the contrary

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, nearly all people in the world have some minds to improve their life quality and gain much more money.

Thus

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, they search new career not only their

cities but

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cities, but

also

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foreign countries. If finding

any one

any person

anyone

, they will go and they have to go;

otherwise

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, they will think their knowledges

is paid

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are paying

for only little amounts.

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, well educated people should mind that they waste lots of

timeto

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time to

graduated

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graduate

from university and so, they

would not be recruit

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would not recruit

from small and low incoming job. In conclusion, the governments have to raise their citizens and they

also

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have to think how young people use their

knowledges

Suggestion

knowledge

efficently

with efficiency; in an efficient manner

efficiently

. What’s more, ıf they do not want to miss any person, they provide some wealthy jobs.

Therefore

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youngers

used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father

younger

do not explore overseas as they do not search it.

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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people prefer working from home while others think working at the office is more effective. Compare these two choice and explain your perferance.

In many countries to day, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?