Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, when the earth
become
Suggestion
becomes
more spherical, the system of
employement
the state of being employed or having a job
employment
changes. People, who have ability of some
jobs or
Accept comma addition
jobs, or
are
achievement
Suggestion
achievable
achieved
and live in a poor country, are hired from oversea countries. In
this
essay,
Firstly
, the
govenments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
of the states have some
responbilities
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
,
such
as provide good education system.
Therefore
, upon looking at the life of people, we see that the
ministery
religious ministers collectively (especially Presbyterian)
ministry
minister
of education pay lots of money
for
Suggestion
to
raise only a person from infant to mature.
However
, if they want to go abroad for
job
Suggestion
a job
, the amount of dollars goes to the rubbish because they could not do anything for their hometowns.
Nevertheless
, they spend their time and
acknowleades
declare to be true or admit the existence or reality or truth of
acknowledges
to increase strange countries.
On the contrary
, nearly all people in the world have some minds to improve their life quality and gain much more money.
Thus
, they search new career not only their
cities but
Accept comma addition
cities, but
also
foreign countries. If finding
any one
any person
anyone
, they will go and they have to go;
otherwise
, they will think their knowledges
is paid
Suggestion
are paying
for only little amounts.
In addition
, well educated people should mind that they waste lots of
timeto
Suggestion
time to
graduated
Suggestion
graduate
from university and so, they
would not be recruit
Suggestion
would not recruit
from small and low incoming job. In conclusion, the governments have to raise their citizens and they
also
have to think how young people use their
knowledges
Suggestion
knowledge
more
efficently
with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
. What’s more, ıf they do not want to miss any person, they provide some wealthy jobs.
Therefore
,
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
do not explore overseas as they do not search it.
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