Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think the modern world gets people more independent on each other . Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While the globe
are going
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is going
to
modernization
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modernize
, many people may argue
this
makes people dependent
,
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,
in
contrast some
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contrast, some
others think
it
it is
it's
cause people live independently
;
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;
however
, I believe nowadays we rely on ourselves more. In the
first
place, the progress of technology in recent years causes the world changes and moves to modernity. I opine
this
is a
further
significant factor which turns people independent. By expanding technology the life style is changed,
for instance
many educational resources and applications are available on internet now and students can use them to improve their studying without a teacher,
besides
the job’s positions in developed cities encourage youths to leave their hometown and parents they move to these cities to have an independent life. In some
cases they
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cases, they
also
decide to study abroad, I
also
believe
this
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
Independence
is being seen in
new generation
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the new generation
. All of these reasons make people
unreliable more and more
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more and more unreliable
. In the
second
place, some people advocate dependency shows itself in
new modern world
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a new modern world
the new modern world
more. In their
view many
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view, many
reasons make them dependent.
For
example today
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example, today
the expenditure of life
is increased
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has been increased, thus
has been increased thus
thus
if young people decide to get married they need their parent’s support with financial matters In conclusion, two different
attitude
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attitudes
are about the dependency in contemporary world some others believe we are dependent in comparison with past while others disagree. I believe today people are more independent nowadays.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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