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Successful sports professional can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while think it is unfair.

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People have different views about, whether successful sportsmen are fair a
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 or other professions. While some people believe that successful sportsmen are fair to earn a
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 of
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, I think that there are other professionals are more fair for it. On the one hand, there are some reasons why successful
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 professional are fair to make a
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 of
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.
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 professional should earn a great deal of
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 as some of their careers end when they are 30 or 35 years old.
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, if the government provides
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 professional with good salary, they will be Olympic winners in the future or they will build new
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 schools in their country for people who are in need.
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, they can help the development of
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sport system
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. In spite of the argument above, I think, that successful
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 professional cannot earn a
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 rather than other vital ones.
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, health care and education should be priorities over any government.
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, there are other professionals who
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 like teachers, doctors and the police since they have spent their time as well as
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 for years on studying and working. By the way, the police work under danger in order to save us and the mother country. In conclusion.
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 some people think that successful
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 professional are more fire for a
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, in my view, other ones are right for it.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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