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Scientists believe that in order to protect the environment, people must use less energy in their daily lives. However, most people have not changed the way they live. Why do you think many people have not taken individual action? What could be done to encourage them to take action?

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In order to save the environment the majority of scientists released that it would be better to cut the
using
a change for the better
easing
 of
energy
.
However
, even after
this
 statement people have not changed their habits and proceed waste the
energy
 fuels. In the following paragraphs I will examine the cause of
such
 careless and suggest the alternative solution.
To begin
 with, in today's modernized world, it is undeniable that with the development of technologies, the average of consuming
energy
 is
also
 growing. With
this
 in mind, human actions toward absorbing electricity are losing. In fact, the electricity cannot be constant forever. To illustrate, it has proved by scientists that the rate of consuming
energy
 grew up to 15% within a year. Even contemporary methods to solve the careless relation of people to
energy fuels
Accept comma addition
energy, fuels
 could not give an ounce of thoughts or ideas. As a solution, it is frequently noted that scientists with government combined efforts as well as
firstly
 tries to help people from the Internet and the range of daily
energy
 consuming. While I would suggest another solution for
such
 a widespread problem. As an example, through the social media advertisements can encourage people to purchase their goods as well as using
this
 method government might make the documentary movie about what will have happened, by the certain time of future. Which could help to people realize that to save the environment they have to start from former objects. To conclude, from the aforementioned it is clear that with encouraging people through showing them their future we may encourage them to change daily habits.
Thus
, there is the plethora number of methods to keep motivating them.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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