International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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International tourism

sytems

instrumentality that combines interrelated interacting artifacts designed to work as a coherent entity

systems

stems

has been

Suggestion

have been

benefical

promoting or enhancing well-being

beneficial

for many locations while its

influense

a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc

influence

on citizens

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

lives

and

environmet

Suggestion

the environment

environment

at all were noted

alo

using the voice; not silently

aloud

also

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Here I'm gonna discuss both benefits an

drawbacks

Suggestion

drawback

this

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system being as much objective as possible It's clear

thast

pointing out something

that

tourism at most brings large profits

for

Suggestion

many less developed countries with big and

interinsting

arousing or holding the attention

interesting

history because these countries have many places to visit but problems with supplying population at the same time.They try to attract as many tourists as possible and

consequently

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become popular among

toursits

someone who travels for pleasure

tourists

This

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method is indeed helpful for less developed countries.

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However other countries

Suggestion

However, other countries

also

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make profit by

this

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method without rich historical

places but

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places, but

thanks to their name.

These countries like

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These countries, like

England

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USA

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France or Japan

poplular

regarded with great favor, approval, or affection especially by the general public

popular

because of their well improved economics

, ,

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widespred

widely circulated or diffused

widespread

among

people

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peoples'

culture

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language and influence which they have on

whole world

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the whole world

and

thus

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its a main reason of

succes

an event that accomplishes its intended purpose

success

in terms of attracting tourists.But these places which can provide for

tourists only historical heritage

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the tourists only historical heritage

of their ancestors or some amusement

cant

can not

can't

make their citizens

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

lives

better

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main role

Suggestion

the main role

impoving

getting higher or more vigorous

improving

inhabitants

lifes

a characteristic state or mode of living

life

is playing economics and reliable president who can fully change the

situatuon

the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time

situation

situations

station

country

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the country

a country

countries

when it the situation seems

incorrigable

impervious to correction by punishment

incorrigible

. In conclu

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the business of providing services to tourists

tourism

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such

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popular count

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it is

it's

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of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant

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ake enviro

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an environment

environment

the environment

nmet better for all countries in the world

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

229 words

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environment
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advantages
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cultural exchange
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